RE: Until Death Us Do Part | ZAPFIC MONDAY (9/11/23) | Prompt: wedding (boda) [Eng/Esp]

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malos10 in Freewriters • 2 years ago

Wow, that was a twist! I didn't expect Sylvia to be Black Widow.

I like how you used the word "rigid" to describe Sylvia's body language. It suggests that she is strong and determined, but also cautious. The way she nods her head is also interesting. It's not a simple yes or no, but something more ambiguous.

The last line is the best part. It's a great way to reveal Sylvia's true identity and also add a touch of humor. I love the way you used the phrase "my love" to make it sound like Sylvester is in love with Sylvia, even though he doesn't know who she really is.

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justclickindiva 2 years ago

An awesome analysis @malos10. You are spot on as the two lovers evaluate each other before making a move. It's a cat and mouse game where the experienced female has an advantage over the unsuspecting male. I'm pleased you liked the last line. I was especially proud of that one making it appear as though the two are intimate.

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